- You insert an extra eight note in bar 3, is that in your score ?
- Try make a habit of counting out long notes. Bar 4 is here shortened to (almost) a 2/4 bar.
- In some places the dynamics are good but less so elsewhere, like the diminuendo starting bar 13.
- I'm all for discreet commas between phrases but your pause between bars 8 and 9 is IMO much too long, suggesting almost a 4/4 bar.
- The accented tenor voice in bars 16/17 is a good idea but just a tad too loud, and in 18/19 it sounds a bit half-hearted.
- In the last bar you should play only the top D. All others are tied over.
Thanks for the detailed feedback, Chris. I think if I had a sustain pedal it would sound 150% better. Also probably shouldn't have played this with a metronome. Clearly this is a romantic piece and most romantic pieces require pedal. the extra eighth note was not in the score, guess I added it unconsciously.
The organ registration that is whiny at the end is some type of 2 foot or 4 foot pipe. I wanted to recreate the singers hum at the end. I take it I didn't succeed
I have not heard either of thses pieces before. The ogran sound on the the Brian Wilson piece sounds nice, but there seems to be too many gaps of silence scattered randomly about. But interesting to listen to this on Piano Society. Did you know thtat he used to live in St. Charles, IL? Supposedly, there is a nice recording studio in the basement of his house. Anyway, happy Thanksgiving to you!
Thanks for listening Monica, those are some cool graphics
I do hope (and expect) to have lots of turkey today, with some cranberry sauce
About the Brian Wilson piece, I tried to leave some silence because the instrument seems to take about 2 seconds to fully decay, and I think it's so cool hearing the sound of an organ carry off al niente
so I didn't want to shave that off by starting right away, but alas, I'm just a beginner organist. I didn't know at all that Brian Wilson lived in St. Charles? That's cool, I remember having cross country meets there at the high school in St. Charles. I wonder if his house is a museum now?! I'd be interested in seeing the recording studio.