I listened with score now, and have some suggestions. I generally admire your idiomatic and individual way with this. I'd do things differently but your choices are always artistic and convincing. There are are many nice things, but I hope I can persuade you to have another go at this and clear up some things that aren't right. I listed those that seemed most important, while not picking on each and every little thing. I'll give timings because my score doesn't have bar numbers.
The run ending the introduction is impassioned but rather fumbled. The page turn after that is not too bad.
1:00 - 1:05 Wrong rhythm (this should be 2 against three)
1:19 The upward run is too fast and unclear
1:25 - 1:26 Why change from f natural to f sharp ?
1:30 Wrong chord - missing note - I miss the molto allargando and concluding fermata
1:31 - 1:47 This passage really needs more work. Some notes are missing, impacting the rhythm
1:48 Why this huge pause
2:35 This bar is one eight too short
2:41 The page turn not too bad but the pause could have easily been cut out
3:09 - 3:20 This passage doesn't quite hang together. Too many notes missing, impacting rhythm
3:25 - 3:28 F sharp should be f natural
3:38 You seem to collapse instead of playing rinforzando
4:17 - 4:21 Here are too many wrong notes, the closing chord is wrong - and that page turn !!!
5:21 A chord is left out, impacting the rhythm
5:58 - 6:02 Hmmmmm.... this needs more work really...
6:09 This is funny... you hurry thought that fermata, play the first chord of the coda (rather dubiously), then take your time
for the page turn ! The fermata gives you all the time in the world to do it silently, if only you think ahead a little.
The coda, while hardly Allegro molto, does actually contain your best moments I think. It seems to work well at a slower speed. Also a great many fumbles throughout these two pages, especially the last, but you manage to convince all the same.
I'm sorry to be a little nitpicky here David. But I am sure you can do much better with this one if you give it some more careful practice. So, no editing for you.... I respect that. Still, you should do something about the page turns somehow. Be sure we'll keep nagging you about it
